Wing Writing

In Te Ngahere we have been learning how to write a descriptive piece of writing to paint a picture in the reader's mind. We watched a video called wings and we had to choose a little section of the video to write about. We had to use a lot of detail because that will help paint the picture in the reader’s mind. The teacher talked to us about this app that you can write a boring word and it will change it into a awesome or more descriptive word, It's called a thesaurus. My part of the video is only about 30 seconds long but I manage to write about 2 paragraphs. What I really enjoyed was using the thesaurus and changing the boring words into cool detailed words. What I could do better is next time is try not use the thesaurus and try and think of the words my self. Here is my draft copy, it is still in working progress.